Visual Arts EE exemplar A · May 2015 · Essay / exemplar

May 's Extended Essay offers a thorough analysis of the architectural work of She provides a good discussion of the theme of post modernism in architecture and how this approach was most suitable for the needs of the individuals attending the School, designed by Michael Graves. 's essay demonstrates the ability to express her ideas clearly with appropriate references to support her ideas. Although I suggested it would have been helpful to have spoken to somebody who works in the building or attends the school in order to get firsthand, primary information, had difficulty contacting staff. When she began the essay, it was evident that her writing and sentence structure was influenced by her native language, Spanish, and also her French education. Therefore, and I worked together at improving sentence structure and ensuring that the most relevant information was included in the essay in order to answer her research question. 's strength in her essay was her ability to begin the process early. She knew early on that she wanted to study either Engineering or Architecture, therefore she chose a topic that she had not heard of specifically, Post Modernist Architecture, in order to improve her knowledge base. Another of 's strengths in the essay is in her thorough analysis of every aspect of the building and how it related to the success of the School. She did not lose sight of the importance of answering her essay question. is also a Higher Art student and she finds that writing this essay has contributed to a deeper understanding of structure in her work. At first, she focused on portraiture but her work slowly evolved into an appreciation of the framework or architecture of objects.